The big city is better than living in a small town or the countryside. That is because of the variety of jobs that are at a city. And, you can buy things like treats or food. People need things to use close by, like neighbours or nearby, friends. I live in a city myself, but I like to go out of town once in awhile. I mostly like to visit a city because it’s faster to call the police or ambulance or fire trucks. So, if you think, go for a city.
You have added a topic sentence. You have reasons and a simple closing sentence.
Could you re-read your closing sentence and re-write it?
Also, you said. “There are a variety of jobs”
Next, explain why having a variety of jobs is a good thing
I look forward to reading your edited work!